Because of our college birthday is around the corner, so many contests are held. At October 30, we were arranged to compete with the school of medicine. But at the time to begin, they didn’t come to the court, so the umpire judged that because of the school of medicine waived their rights, so we won the game. And the second game was at the October 31.
And at October 31, we were arranged to compete with the school of occupational therapy. We were all in excitation, and ready to fight to our enemy. First, the ladies of our apartment came to the court to match. But they lost. And then, it’s time for us to fight. Although the competitor’s people are more than us, but we never give up. At the end, we lost our game, but we felt no regret.
I think the tug of war’s meaning is not who win the game, but the process that we are hang together and try to win the game. Although the result of the game is also important, but there is a winner, there is a loser. So, we had tried our best to win the game, we are still the best.
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Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"Because of our college birthday is around the corner, so many contests are held."
It should be
"Because our college's birthday was around the corner, many contests were held."
You can look at http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
There is something wrong of your basic sentence parts.
"But at the time to begin, they didn’t come to the court, so the umpire judged that because of the school of medicine waived their rights, so we won the game."
It should be
"Awhen it was time to begin, they didn't come to the court. The umpire decided that we won the game, because the school of medicine waived their rights."
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http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/basicparts.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
We use "on" to designate on day.
"And at October 31, we were arranged to compete with the school of occupational therapy."
It should be
"On October 31, we were arranged to compete with the school of occupational therapy."
You can look at
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/prepositions.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
We use "on" to designate on day.
"At October 30, we were arranged to compete with the school of medicine."
It should be
"On October 30, we were arranged to compete with the school of medicine."
You can look at http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
There is something wrong of your basic sentence parts.
"We were all in excitation, and ready to fight to our enemy."
It should be
"We were all exciting, and ready to fight our enemy."
You can look at
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/basicparts.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
There is something wrong of the word"regret"
"At the end, we lost our game, but we felt no regret."
It should be
"At the end, we lost our game, but we had no regret."
You can look at
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/nouns.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"I think the tug of war’s meaning is not who win the game, but the process that we are hang together and try to win the game."
It should be
"I thought that tug of war doesn't mean to win games, the process that we worked together and tried to win the game was more important."
You can look at http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"Although the result of the game is also important, but there is a winner, there is a loser."
It should be
"Although the result of the game was important.But there is a winner, there is a loser."
You can look at http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"So, we had tried our best to win the game, we are still the best."
It should be
"We had tried our best to win the game, so we were still best."
You can look at http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
"Because of our college birthday is around the corner, so many contests are held."
It should be
"Our college's birthday was around the corner,so many contests were held."
"And at October 31, we were arranged to compete with the school of occupational therapy."
It should be...
"On October 31, we were arranged to compete with the school of occupational therapy."
"and ready to fight to our enemy"
it should be ..
"and are ready to fight to our enemy"
"Although the competitor’s people are more than us, but we never give up"
it should be..
"Although the competitor’s people are more than us, we never give up"
"And then, it’s time for us to fight."
it should be ...
"And then, it was time for us to fight."
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