October 11, my club's (Chunghua 彰友會) members and I went to the 望高寮 and Tung-Hai night market. I remember it was a cold night, my partner and I rode my motorcycle to 望高寮 at first.
When we arrived at 望高寮, all the juniors are excited. No wonder they were so excited, the scenes there are too beautiful to be true. All the light and cars mixed into a wide light-sea. In front of us is Taichung city, and the back of us is Changhua city. Everybody takes pictures with each other, and I think this experience will be a forever memory of those junior schoolmates. Although there was really cold, but we all had a wonderful time there.
Then, we arrived the Tung-Hai night market. It was the second times being there. The Steamed sandwich there is so nice. It contains beef, Sour Mustard Greens and peanut powder. And there is a store sells papaya milk; their papaya milk is also my favorite. My friends and I enjoy our food there, and really happy about that night’s trip.
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
"I remember it was a cold night, my partner and I rode my motorcycle to 望高寮 at first."
It shold be
"I remembered it was a cold night, my partner and I rode my motorcycle to 望高寮 at first."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
"When we arrived at 望高寮, all the juniors are excited."
It should be
"When we arrived at 望高寮, all the juniors were excited."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"Everybody takes pictures with each other, and I think this experience will be a forever memory of those junior schoolmates."
It shold be
"Everybody taked pictures with each other, and I thank this experience would be a forever memory of those junior schoolmates."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"The Steamed sandwich there is so nice."
It shold be
"The Steamed sandwich there was so nice."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"And there is a store sells papaya milk; their papaya milk is also my favorite."
It shold be
"And there was a store selling papaya milk; their papaya milk was also one of my favorites."
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http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"My friends and I enjoy our food there, and really happy about that night’s trip."
It shold be
"My friends and I enjoyed our food there, and were really happy about that night's trip."
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At first, according to the web, http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/601/01/, the story you described is past so you should use the right verb tense.
1. the scenes there were too beautiful to be true.
2. I thought this experience will be a forever memory. (4 point)
Secondly, according to the web, http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/prepositions.htm, the word “arrive” should add a preposition “at”. (3 point)
The last, according to the web, http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/conjunctions.htm, the conjunction “although” doesn’t have to add “but”. Because the conjunction has the meaning already, so it’s no need to add the “but” (3 point)
Hi, Flex. Your article is so vivid. It’s so pity that I didn’t join your outing, but I found some mistakes in your article. If you can devise the faults, the article will become excellent.
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