At October 24, this day was the president cup basketball contest, CSMU. We have trained our freshman teammates for weeks, so this day was us to check our training result.
We were arranged to compete with the school of optometry. All of us desired to win the game, and there were also many people coming to court to encourage us. Although our team members are less than the school of optometry, but our morale would never less than our competitor. Soon, the game started. Everyone tried his best to win the game, and the cheer squads also encourage us. But we still lost. Although some people were too less experience to play the game, but they also wanted to help our team to win the game. Thanks for everyone that at October 24 came to sport court to encourage us.
Although we lost this game, this means that we didn’t train enough. We will still try our best to win the next game no matter who is our competitor.
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Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"We have trained our freshman teammates for weeks, so this day was us to check our training result."
It should be
"We had trained our freshman teammates for weeks, so we shold check our training result this day."
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Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"Although our team members are less than the school of optometry, but our morale would never less than our competitor."
It should be
"Although our team members were less than the school of optometry, but our morale would never less than our competitor."
You can look at http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"Everyone tried his best to win the game, and the cheer squads also encourage us."
It should be
"Everyone tried his best to win the game, and the cheer squad also encouraged us."
You can look at
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
There is a mistake in using the word"experience"
"Although some people were too less experience to play the game, but they also wanted to help our team to win the game."
It should be
"Although some people didn't have much experience of playing games, but they also wanted to help our team to win the game."
You can look at
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/nouns.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
There is something wrong of your basic sentence parts.
"Thanks for everyone that at October 24 came to sport court to encourage us."
It should be
"Thanks for everyone October 24 coming to sport court to encourage us on October 24."
You can look at
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/basicparts.htm
Your writing is very good. But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"We will still try our best to win the next game no matter who is our competitor."
It should be
"We would try our best to win next game, no matter who would be our competitor."
You can look at
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/sequence.htm
hi Felix,
"and there were also many people coming to court to encourage us"
I think it should add "the" infront of the court
and...
"Although our team members are less than the school of optometry, but our morale would never less than our competitor."
You forgot to use verb in next sentence, so I think the right sentence is...
"Although our team members are less than the school of optometry, but our morale would "be" never less than our competitor."
And...
"and the cheer squads also encourage us"
it should be...
"and the cheer squads also encouraged us"
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