October 20 & October 21 were the new arrivals greeting camping of AFL. We had prepared it for months, and we all hoped that this camping will have a happy ending. Although we faced so many difficulties when we prepared this activity, finally we solved all of these problems one by one.
And new arrivals greeting camping came, actually I think it is better then I was expected. Everything is under our control and nothing bad happened. The small games are so success that every one can play happily. Although it’s really tired, at that night we worked until 2 o’clock AM. But it seemed that all of the camping members were happy about this camping. And I think this is the greatest reward for us.
Although there were so many argues and unhappiness when we plan the camping, but all the end good is good, the new arrivals greeting camping is so success. Maybe the process of working is so hard and difficult, but if we try our best, we still can do it well.
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"We had prepared it for months, and we all hoped that this camping will have a happy ending."
It should be
"We had prepared it for months, and we all hoped that this camping would have a happy ending."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should correct the clauses and change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"And new arrivals greeting camping came, actually I think it is better then I was expected."
It should be
"When new arrivals greeting camping came, actually I think it was better than I was expected."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"Everything is under our control and nothing bad happened."
It should be
"Everything was under our control and nothing bad happened."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"The small games are so success that every one can play happily."
It should be
"The small games were so successful that every one could play happily."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"And I think this is the greatest reward for us."
It should be
"And I thought this was the greatest reward for us."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"Although there were so many argues and unhappiness when we plan the camping, but all the end good is good, the new arrivals greeting camping is so success."
It should be
"Although there were so many argues and unhappiness when we planned the camping, but all were good at the end and the new arrivals greeting camping was so successful."
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Your writing is very good.But there's something wrong in it.
You should change this verb from the present into the past tense.
"The process of working was so hard and difficult, but I thought if we try our best, we still can do it well."
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